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1. Story: Consummation by Rogziel | Report Abuse | Report Spam

Comment Posted By: MightyMaeve on May 31, 2010 | URL: http://mightymaeve.livejournal.com | Assign Comment to Author

I know you wrote this quite a while ago, but I just wanted to let you know it's still having an affect over readers!
He surprised her with another kiss, one that was more forceful and urgent--an adult's kiss...
She'd do anything to please him...And, now, if he told her to get on her knees and suck his cock, he knew she would.
God, he wanted to fuck her. . .The urge to just grab her, throw her over the arm of the couch and take her was unexpectedly strong.
..oh! Stomach lurches for me at those words!
Koshiro was careful not to pin her down too roughly as she wiggled underneath him. . .Kissing Nanoka had been the emotional equivalent of popping the cork off a well-shaken bottle of champagne, and the shameful, incestuous passion for her that he had tried to bury deep inside himself was suddenly released
AWWW! I love that simile! WOW. This is heavy and intense! As you said, I also love Koi Kaze, but very little erotica when the story is so wonderfully psychological and deep makes me sad.
It couldn't be too rough, or too sudden. Maybe later (and here he was, already assuming that there would be a next time) but not now.
Please tell me you wrote one of those? Or know of another fanfic-er who did? I'm the kind of person who loves this kind of scene, so idealized and romantic, but I also love the angry sort of uncontrollable kind (dark kink) too...With Koshiro's temper and his habit of projecting his self-anger onto others, you think there would be some moments of harsh, rough, uncontrollable acts... That reminds me, I also liked this line: He had always been a brusque man, but his roughness was part of what excited her.
You even got his mannerism! ("nervously ruffling his hair with one hand and gesturing to the futon")
I love dry humping...don't see it too often in manga, anime or fanfiction! ("Nanoka gasped and hooked her legs around his waist; Koshiro moved his hips back and then thrust again, simulating the sex they were soon to have.")
Damnation was his only salvation. HOW PERFECT~! He'd die without her, living an emotionless, going-through-the-motions non-life! To be fully alive, to feel, to be so thrilled, to appreciate the magnitude of simple things like cherry blossoms, he needs her...I get it! You said it well, this cycle of damnation due to moral layers upon nature...
I liked your perception here: It shouldn't have been him. If their parents had never divorced, if they had been raised together as normal siblings, this would never have happened. Genetic Sexual Attraction (GSA) is something I rarely see discuss related to Koi Kaze, and yet Koi Kaze is one of the most realistic and touching portrayals of this phenomena that I have ever read. Well done!

2. Story: Home/Bodies by Rx7 | Report Abuse | Report Spam

Comment Posted By: seena on May 22, 2010 | Assign Comment to Author

If your company is anything like mine, at one time or another you've traded in your business casual attire for a pair of jeans and a T-shirt to work from home. Every member of our CRM magazine editorial staff has conducted interviews, filed stories, and edited copy from home for various reasons, from recovery from surgery to having plumbing repaired. CRM's editors typically rely on telecommuting for these kinds of sporadic personal events. But when New York City's security+ certification transit union members spent three days on the picket lines in December 2005 during the transit strike, we had to telecommute. Working from home went from being an occasional choice to being the core of our contingency strategy for maintaining normalcy (which means, in our case, the controlled chaos of hitting lots of deadlines).

3. Story: 3241 by Rx7 | Report Abuse | Report Spam

Comment Posted By: poker francais on May 19, 2010 | URL: http://www.pokerenfrancais.eu/ | Assign Comment to Author

Thanks for sharing this site and article. It is well written and good story.

4. Story: Touch' by Random1377 | Report Abuse | Report Spam

Comment Posted By: will on March 11, 2010 | Assign Comment to Author

hi good story nice structure but what confuses me is how the f*** that this isn't a lemon LOL honestly first chapter alot of stuff that is at least above pg-13 im not complaing but surprised and amused that this isn't labled as such

5. Story: Father by Lord Talon | Report Abuse | Report Spam

Comment Posted By: Tom on March 10, 2010 | URL: http://www.toms-world.org/

I just got done reading Chapter 5 and I have to say that Erik definitely got what he deserved. Damn, Gendo screwed him over good is all I have to say.

Keep it up, I look forward to new chapters.

6. Story: Evangelion Genocide: Extended by Rommel | Report Abuse | Report Spam

Comment Posted By: Soul Fire on March 4, 2010 | Assign Comment to Author

Hi sorry I have not posted a review for quite a while but I have been really busy with my Film and Creative writing course at University in all honesty as well as moving house. The last two chapters have been brilliant. I am really enjoying the subtle changes you are making to Asuka's character as they are believable changes for starters. Unlike alot of fanfiction I read where the protagonists change drastically over a short period of time, Asuka and Shinji to an exstent, have both changed slowly which is more enjoyable to read about in my opinon.
Im really interested in where Klunge and SEELE are going to take the story but (Predicatably) I wish for a happy ending of sorts.

Anyway keep up the good work. Your writing is really enthralling to read and I'm taking alot of notes on some of the stylistic choices and methods you use to improve upon my own creative work which has consisted of far too much poetry for my liking. Cheers

Dean

7. Story: I Was a Teenage Dummy Plug by Foxboy | Report Abuse | Report Spam

Comment Posted By: Joshua Stovall on March 3, 2010 | Assign Comment to Author

Its been years since he has updated and I for one am sick of waiting. THis is an amazing story and it deserves to be finished.

8. Story: Misato's Christmas Party-MST by Zentrodie | Report Abuse | Report Spam

Comment Posted By: will on March 2, 2010 | Assign Comment to Author

wow not bad but some parts i got mixed up with the movie and the character off side comments and moments of OOC also you spelt quarantine wrongand spelt it quaranteen instead of teen its tine

9. Story: Home/Bodies by Rx7 | Report Abuse | Report Spam

Comment Posted By: Meltron5000 on February 26, 2010 | Assign Comment to Author

What really bugged me about Home/Bodies was the lack of Misato smut. We see more of Ritsuko and Shinji then Misato/Shinji, which is kind of odd considering Misato actually LIVES with Shinji

10. Story: Heavy by A. | Report Abuse | Report Spam

Comment Posted By: A. on February 19, 2010

On February 24th, 2010, all sixteen chapters of the series will be start being posted. Maybe some the next day. Even tho the series does not only last 16 episodes, the anime series will continue the story.

11. Story: An Assassin's Memories by Mister Cynical | Report Abuse | Report Spam

Comment Posted By: galadan.421 on February 12, 2010 | URL: http:// | Assign Comment to Author

Well, i thought this fic was too far away from the original world of Evangelion to bother reading it. I'm glad I did read it because it's was quite entertaining! Well the story is nice and it has a good structure so keep it up. I hope you'll write the next chapter(s).

12. Story: Heavy by A. | Report Abuse | Report Spam

Comment Posted By: A. on February 12, 2010

Heres some series taglines: "Everything has a price", "Your only limit is your age", "Death is not the end".

13. Story: I Do by Innortal | Report Abuse | Report Spam

Comment Posted By: will on February 11, 2010 | URL: http:// | Assign Comment to Author

ok its started out ok not to wild and believable
but as you kept going you started getting more and more well dramatic and crazy and well i just dont know how to explain it
also it was modestly funny in the beggining but i think you may have taken it too far honestly so far my count is like over 20 marriages and 5 to 8 pregnancies honestly man that is not all that funny
the story at this point looks like you milked it a little too much and it stopped being enjoyably funny and now is sad, confusing and well i dont want to read it because now the story feels ruined
im not trying to be rude but you started off great i mean good job but now its a train wreck
i actually enjoyed reading the beggining when there was some innocense in the story but now i havent enjoyed reading the last few chapters
i not trying to be the worlds biggest jerk here but a little control and sanity would be appreciated

14. Story: A Fetid Encounter by Thermopyle | Report Abuse | Report Spam

Comment Posted By: HiroshimaNagasaki on February 3, 2010 | Assign Comment to Author

I suggest the admin to remove this piece of text because it undermines this site's good reputation.

15. Story: The Swim of Things by Ret Nuh | Report Abuse | Report Spam

Comment Posted By: biggoron13 on January 27, 2010 | URL: http://www.thesameasmyemailaddress.com | Assign Comment to Author

very good and long shinji/asuka fic.that is nice and not normal these days.keep up the good work and upload soon

16. Story: Heavy by A. | Report Abuse | Report Spam

Comment Posted By: A. on January 27, 2010

A big change has been made.

17. Story: Heavy by A. | Report Abuse | Report Spam

Comment Posted By: A. on January 26, 2010

A few changes have been made which Im gonna keep under wraps, and also the series is now called "Heavy", based on the density of one of *element* which makes up the main plot devices the Spooky Electric's.

18. Story: Heavy by A. | Report Abuse | Report Spam

Comment Posted By: A. on January 24, 2010

Right now, the series is planned to one day become an anime series. Currently, 27 episodes have been structured. For a planned but unlikely grand sum of 1, 125 episodes. Spooky Electric will also deal with many issues: Life on other worlds, religion, addiction, life after death, abuse, and adolescences.

19. Story: Heavy by A. | Report Abuse | Report Spam

Comment Posted By: A. on January 24, 2010

Right now the story really sounds like hard science fiction, but when the chapters start coming out, this evolves almost immediately into a full on drama story of how the Spooky Electric just kind of fucked up this college students already bad life. The college student is one named Xcaret Madroces in the year 2017, who as a child was brutally beaten and almost sexually abused by his father who once beat him to the point that his head started to bleed, and a condition that he never knew he had was revealed in that same incident. His condition was one of a person who has no sweat glands. Therefore, they can over heat and die because sweat is an advent of the body imployed to help cool the body down. And if you dont have sweat glands that can be dangerous. His story carries on from that pivotal childhood moment.

20. Story: Heavy by A. | Report Abuse | Report Spam

Comment Posted By: A. on January 24, 2010

I dont understand what your saying, datdude. And if your saying what I think you are, this is just a brief description/preview. Its not even a full chapter. Full chapters will start either in February or March. Starting with "Activation One: Pilot". This will be like the pilot chapter. As hinted by the title.

21. Story: Heavy by A. | Report Abuse | Report Spam

Comment Posted By: Tom on January 24, 2010 | URL: http://www.toms-world.org/

I was able to fix the story text on my end.

22. Story: Heavy by A. | Report Abuse | Report Spam

Comment Posted By: datdude on January 24, 2010

Umm did the line editor take a shit on you or am I missing something?

23. Story: Asuka's Smile by avarice | Report Abuse | Report Spam

Comment Posted By: dasot10pdx on January 24, 2010 | URL: http:// | Assign Comment to Author

First of all great story. Cannot wait for the second one (hopefully there will be one). I liked how shinji was pretty much himself but older. Given three years to mature i am sure shinji would have grown somewhat of a spine. I liked how you wrote the semi lemon scene. It was tastefully done. I have read a many of eva fanfics and this one is one of the better ones. I cannot some of the great eva fanfics but i really do think it has the potential. Now i have to stories to enjoy on darkscribes. Asuka's smile and Genocide by Rommel. Hope to read more of your stories soon
-dasot10pdx

24. Story: Rebuild of Evangelion: Eros and Thanatos by Sailor Star Dust | Report Abuse | Report Spam

Comment Posted By: Legendary on January 23, 2010

Kinda disappointed you didn't really kill off Asuka there; it would have been quite impressive and, to me, fits the rest of the story more. But I'm weird. Other than that, Final really seemed to cap off what your 3.0 was about, so good job!

25. Story: Silence of the Angels by Northridge | Report Abuse | Report Spam

Comment Posted By: OmegaRed on January 22, 2010 | URL: http:// | Assign Comment to Author

Was this story just released? Because that would only explain
as to why this story only has so few views for it, this is really good and the characters
fit their roles so well. And not the run-of-the-mill
eva fic but one with a twist. Try seeing this story to the end and I will keep
reading

26. Story: Children of an Elder God mst by Zentrodie | Report Abuse | Report Spam

Comment Posted By: kelpy on January 21, 2010 | URL: http:// | Assign Comment to Author

I am curious if the actual story will ever be finished I mean it should only have a few chapters left but it has been 6 years. I it gets finished

27. Story: An Assassin's Memories by Mister Cynical | Report Abuse | Report Spam

Comment Posted By: will on January 21, 2010 | URL: http:// | Assign Comment to Author

wow amazing story and nice structure

i hope you continue it would be sad not to end it

besides that kiss with the faulty assassain is there any romance i mean come on dude all this killing feels slightly repetive

not to be rude but this feels like its going to have one of those sad endings where shinji might die

-----no one could blame you for making it have a happy ending------

28. Story: Evangelion Genocide: Extended by Rommel | Report Abuse | Report Spam

Comment Posted By: Time Shifter on January 19, 2010 | URL: http:// | Assign Comment to Author

I suppose I'll begin with an apology; I neglected to leave a review for the last chapter, and this story definitely deserves at least that much.
As always I enjoy the OCs you introduce to the story, and Fuuka seems like she'll be interesting. More than that, however, the interactions between the main characters, almost all of it centered on Asuka, is what keeps me reading. Keiko's casual dismissal of Asuka's actions, Asuka's inability to understand, which was helped by Shinji's words in the kitchen, which helped Asuka realize what effect forgiveness would hold for Misato on the balcony. The slow growth of each character affects the slow growth of those around them. I especially liked Shinji's conversation with Gendo, for it showed he's grown enough to ask his father for information, yet is still too weak to push if his father turns him down. Keiko, too, is recovering, yet clearly damaged from the events of the battle a few chapters ago. And did I read the words "Rei" and "love?" Perhaps it's a friendly love with Keiko, or is it more?
Kluge and Keel seem to be after the exact same thing as in the series, but this new "Kaworu" creeps me out, and I'm sure Asuka will never be able to forget the upcoming confrontation with it. 100 pages sure sounds exciting, and thus I understand there will be a long wait for it. I'll be here to enjoy the final product.

29. Story: Ouch by Ikarus Onesun | Report Abuse | Report Spam

Comment Posted By: Galadan.421 on January 17, 2010 | Assign Comment to Author

Nice Fic
I enjoy reading it, it's a very nice story with a really good situation. I reaaly like the way you made the characters but personnaly i don't think shinji is that desperate .
i hope to read the next chapter.

30. Story: The Party by Zentrodie | Report Abuse | Report Spam

Comment Posted By: ligerzero on January 15, 2010 | URL: http:// | Assign Comment to Author

Nice approach, a great party and its nasty consequences (or maybe not) I'm waiting for the next update to see you will unveil the actual situation.

31. Story: Possibilities by Pseudonym | Report Abuse | Report Spam

Comment Posted By: VillajRemnante on January 13, 2010 | URL: http:// | Assign Comment to Author

My compliments. These two chapters have been very interesting. The modern vs. future approach is a welcome change, as most fanfics have futuristic technology from the real series. Also, making Asuka American was favorable in my opinion. Makes the exclusion of her German rantings allowable. Do keep it up!

32. Story: Point of View by Bolivar Q. Shagnasty | Report Abuse | Report Spam

Comment Posted By: Galadan421 on January 11, 2010 | URL: http:// | Assign Comment to Author

I'm not usally a big fan of lemon fics but this one is reallyfunny.
The idea is nice and was well used, could be funier with more every day life (no sex I mean :d).
I really like the characters of misato i kinda see her like that.
Good fic I hope to see the next chapter.

33. Story: Father by Lord Talon | Report Abuse | Report Spam

Comment Posted By: Dark Shinji on January 9, 2010 | URL: http://www.darkscribes.org/author/Tom | Assign Comment to Author

Easily one of the best stories that I have read here on DS. I like how you have taken the characters and changed them around, developing them fully within the roles/paths that you wanted them to have.
While some people might cry about the characters being OOC, I say ignore them. Keep on doing what you are doing. I myself do not mind a little OOCness, espicially if it helps to tell the story.
I loved chapter 7, particularly the marriage scene. That was perfect.
Keep writing!

34. Story: Together We Stand by Hotwire | Report Abuse | Report Spam

Comment Posted By: jouli on January 7, 2010 | Assign Comment to Author

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find out your site. Your site is really nice especially this article is very
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35. Story: The Games People Play by Zentrodie | Report Abuse | Report Spam

Comment Posted By: Galadan.421 on January 7, 2010 | URL: http:// | Assign Comment to Author

In one world : fun
I'd mostly like because it's completly out of Eva world but respect eva characters and interaction.
Nice to read, maybe a bit long to start and a little to quick to finish..hum
entertaining.
bye

36. Story: Home/Bodies by Rx7 | Report Abuse | Report Spam

Comment Posted By: Mr. Pointy on December 28, 2009

Been reading this again. Still awesome.

37. Story: Father by Lord Talon | Report Abuse | Report Spam

Comment Posted By: Ron on December 27, 2009 | Assign Comment to Author

Just stumbled across this today. I really enjoyed this story.
Hope to see you pick it up again and some of the the others I
read here. Keep up the good work!

38. Story: Evangelion Genocide: Extended by Rommel | Report Abuse | Report Spam

Comment Posted By: Dan (Ishagu) on December 22, 2009 | Assign Comment to Author

How can I put in to words the way I feel about this fic?
To me the success of Evangelion lies in what many people consider to be it's downside. The show introduces a colourful and diverse cast, and although it plays around with their potential happiness or even a light at the end of the tunnel, there's no hollywood happy ending to the ride.
It's because we want things to end differently, that the community of fan-fiction writers have been able to create such fantasic stories. Some of the these I hold in a very high regard. The epic "Eva-R", Fiss' "Higher Learning," and of course your "Genocide" can proudly stand at the top.
It's clear from the way you write and portray the characters that you have very strongly grasped the essense of the show. Asuka, Misato and Shinji in particular stand out, and your broken Ritsuko's motives are entirely understandable.
The way the relationship has grown in such a paced way is a testament to your skill as a writer and story-teller. Far too early in past fictions have characters become too distant from the official show's counterparts. The Asuka/Shinji interaction is some of the best that I've read, and is completely in tune with what could possibly have happened had the show just carried on past the original episodes.
Can I offer a critisim? Not easily. At times when I read some of the conversation in the story, I feel that your long and detailed descriptions slow the pace down in my mind, and thusly the conversations don't flow at a pace that I would be more attuned to. Would I change anything? Not really, despite my critique, it's for that same reason that the story stands out and is so charming in the first place.
I am greatly anticipating your final chapters. Let me know if you have an ETA by any chance. Good luck, and keep up this awesome piece of work.

39. Story: Son of Hogwarts by LD | Report Abuse | Report Spam

Comment Posted By: Lord Talon on December 15, 2009

Very, very good start! I do hope that this story continues onward!

40. Story: Home/Bodies by Rx7 | Report Abuse | Report Spam

Comment Posted By: Rubble400 on December 2, 2009 | Assign Comment to Author

Great story, but when will you post a new chapter

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